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Checkmate- Sam-Arj (Aham & Kashmira) FIC, PART 19 UPDATED on 22.4.2018
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added dev's photo in the intro page  Angel Angel
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I didn't expect this turn of events, Nice, well the birthday party well written, i felt i was part of it, like guest of their party, arjun being cool cool listening silently, being friendly with them is good but again you as a reader would doubt his actions. 
 ending with the "forced marriage" thing was not expected, so lets see what happens next. 

btw - arjun saying, the one, who hurt sam should get punches, i m watching you man, if you do hurt her or use her, you will be getting those on your face.

Nice progress !!!!
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(03-03-2018, 11:57 AM)Rehan Wrote: The first part of this story is very fascinating, very interesting, I enjoyed reading, one thing ill say, girls should be careful especially in the dark in a such places, if you are already going there alone then it is better to be alert and not go in dreams as if you are alone there, keep your eyes open and see who is watching you, girls should learn how  to protect them self, what if the guy did not come, she was in their hands, scary and interesting, I'll keep reading

Thank You for your lovely review. I am glad that you are liking. Yes, Girls should be very careful & every girl should learn to defend themselves. It's a must in today's society. Yes, here Arjun made a heroic entry & protected Samaira. This is just the beginning. More coming up. Lets see what happen next. Will wait for your review.
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(04-03-2018, 04:56 PM)Ron Wrote: reading part 1 of chapter 3, what kind of office he got a job in, not really friendly people are in there.
finish work till going home, feels like slavery work, do work do work and those hiden camera's bap reh, alcoholic workers are okay but those who don't finish their work are fearing their boss 

i feel arjun is here for higher job, lets see what happens next, don't mind me in commenting par parts of this chapter, also working also reading 
so far enjoying this one.

will comment after again Smile

Yes, the office & the whole environment in the office is indeed suspicious. Let's see what Arjun is here. It's okay & it's really a treat to read your reviews. I am glad that you are liking the progress.
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(04-03-2018, 05:18 PM)Ron Wrote: Hmmm, Part 2 and 3 of chapter 3 were interesting, 

Sam and neil friendship is cute, the way he helps her guides her pushes her and protects her is nicely written, her friendship with arjun is also nice.. but something in this guy is mystery

Ahm, EVERY one left and this man stayed till 11pm outside office, why, doesnt he have a place to go? or has something in mind, trying to win the game, story getting more interesting, now what does he want to do, be the Bosss or what?

Let's see.

I have a gutt feeling, he is friend of sam just because she is daughter of owner, trying to be friend here and trying to be friend with the big madam of office, 
interesting 

will read chapter 4

Thank You, Thank You, Thank You for reading so keenly & pointing out every aspects. Honestly, I am really enjoying posting it here. Thanks for liking Arjun & Samair's friendship. Yes, Arjun is indeed mysterious. But to know about his motive you need to read the upcoming chapters.
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(04-03-2018, 05:20 PM)Ronshaan Wrote: added dev's photo in the intro page  Angel Angel

Thank You. I was unable to do that & also Thank you for following "Checkmate" Thread.
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(04-03-2018, 05:54 PM)Ron Wrote: I didn't expect this turn of events, Nice, well the birthday party well written, i felt i was part of it, like guest of their party, arjun being cool cool listening silently, being friendly with them is good but again you as a reader would doubt his actions. 
 ending with the "forced marriage" thing was not expected, so lets see what happens next. 

btw - arjun saying, the one, who hurt sam should get punches, i m watching you man, if you do hurt her or use her, you will be getting those on your face.

Nice progress !!!!

Wow. Thank You for feeling the Birthday party is so real. It's great to know. Hmm, I know that Samrat entry in last scene & the Forced Marriage twist was totally unexpected. Let's see, what happen next.
So much doubt on Arjun Mehra. Ohh!! Poor he.
Thank you again for your lovely feed backs. Keep reading. Loads of Love.
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Part-5

Next Day, Morning.

Arjun parked his bike outside an old apartment & went inside.He climbed the stairs & went on third floor.He knocked three times at the door.A girl opened the door. Arjun went inside & then she shut the door.Arjun sat on sofa & The Girl offered coffee.

Arjun- Thanks Bonnie.

Bonnie- You welcome Arjun.But why you came here so urgently???Its not safe for both of us.

Arjun- Nobody is following me so relax.You safety matters to me also.

Bonnie- What happened Arjun??? Whats wrong???

Arjun- Samrat Khanna fixed Samaira's marriage.

Bonnie- What??? With whom??It will harmful for our mission.

Arjun- It will be harmful for Samaira.Whatever I understand in these few days, Samaira is not at all associated with Khanna Industries.Infact, she don't have any contact with Samrat Khanna.

Bonnie- Giving clean-chit to Samaira???

Arjun- She is a victim Bonnie.

Bonnie- You reached on conclusion so suddenly??

Arjun-not sudden conclusion. I followed her & checked her all details & now I am sure about it.

Bonnie- so, whats next Arjun???

Arjun- Just think Bonnie, Samaira's father is an rich businessman but the daughter working in an advertisement agency.

Bonnie- Whats abnormal in it Arjun???

Arjun- nothing abnormal.infact, quite challenging.Father & daughter relationship is not healthy.Only daughter but she lives in a rented home.But suddenly after years, father came & took the daughter with him.He fixed her marriage.

Bonnie- Come on Arjun, Every father care for his daughter.

Arjun- Then, what kind of caring is this???He fixed his daughter marriage with Dev Arora, an alcholic, irresponsible man.

Bonnie- Samaira Khanna's marriage with Dev Arora.Future owner of Khanna Industries is getting married with an employee! That's too an arrange marriage.

Arjun- here, I am confused. If Samrat Khanna fixed his daughter marriage with any rich businessman, politician & their sons, then I can clearly understand the stragedy. But here...

Bonnie- hmm, You have a point Arjun.

Arjun finished his coffee & got up from the sofa.He went inside the bedroom & took a file which labelled Samrat Khanna.

Arjun- Also, look at Samrat life's Bonnie.His wife left him. But still he didn't get married again.

Bonnie- May be because, he still love his wife yaa, for Samaira.

Arjun-Then, Who is this Nandini Pandey??? & He don't love Samaira that much.

Bonnie- You are saying these things from Samaira's Point of view.

Arjun- I am saying things not from anybody's point of view.I am saying things which are logical.

Bonnie- Then, may be some property issue??

Arjun- bingo. Its mean Khanna Industries real owner is not Samrat Khanna.Then, how much his share & also what is the role of Nandini??? We still didn't get her background clearly.

Bonnie- Don't you think Arjun you are heading towards wrong path.

Arjun- Why you feel so???

Bonnie- We are here for a big mission & here we are discussing about trivial property issues of Khannas.

Arjun- HIS last message mentioned about Khanna Industries. I am sure it is the main key to our mission.We need to learn each & every details about Khanna's.

Bonnie- Okay Arjun. As you say. I have full faith on you.

Arjun- Bonnie, find out every details about Khanna Industries.The Shares, Financial conditions & all.

Bonnie- Okay.

Arjun- Its time to explore Khanna Industries.Phrase 2 of our mission.where is your laptop???

Bonnie- Why??

Arjun- I am not here only to discuss the progress.I am also here to hack Dev Arora's computer password.

Bonnie- All the best

She handed him the laptop.

Arjun- one more cup of coffee???

Bonnie- yaa, sure.I know u didn't eat breakfast.Wait, I am coming.

Arjun- thanks Bonnie.

After an hour,

Arjun- I got the password.Okay, I am leaving.

Bonnie- Take care Arjun.

Arjun- hmm, don't worry. thats why I chose Saturday, half day & also Samrat & Nandini both will not come office today & first day, I noticed Dev's cabin, there is no CCTV Camera.

 

Arjun sat on his desk in Khanna Industries.Its almost 11:30 am & Office will close at 12:30 pm.Arjun total attention towards Dev's cabin.He saw the canteen boy came in Dev's cabin & after some mins left from their.After sometime, he saw, the Canteen boy was coming with a tray & a cup in it.He smiled that his assumption was right.Arjun got up from his chair & went towards the canteen boy's direction.Arjun slightly bumped with the boy & dropped a small tablet in the coffee cup.

Canteen Boy- You are wearing spectacles, but still you are bumping with others.Put another spectacles in your eyes (Irritatingly)

Arjun- Sorry, I was lost in some thoughts.

12:30pm,

Arjun & teji both preparing to leave the office. Teji was in hurry today.

Arjun- I need to go to wash-room urgently.Teji, I know u are in hurry, you go. I am coming.

Teji- Okay, I am going, byee.

Arjun- Bye.

Arjun hurried towards wash-room.Arjun closed the door of the washroom.After 30 mins, he opened his bag & put gloves in his hand.Again, sliently Arjun  went towards Dev's cabin, hiding himself from the cameras.He carefully opened Dev's cabin.He is right.Dev was in deep slumber.He carefully put Dev's finger in Bio-metric security password reader.Then, Arjun took out a pen-drive & started coping files from Dev's computer.


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its a very nice story indeed, the friendship of sam and neil is unique, now a days it is rare thing.
arjun playing games with his new boss but i doubt he is here for some kind of mission, what is it, no idea yet, why dev is samrat's favorite man i wonder, why he decided the marriage of his daughter without even asking her. 

so far the story is nice, great changes and movements of characters, loved to read it, i was reading one after another in one go and it felt like i am watching some kind of movie.

sam as a character seems beautiful and happy person, everyone would want to be her friend, 
by the way the cake on her face was nice moment, we do such things with our close friends. 

lovely story so far. 
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(05-03-2018, 01:55 PM)Madhumita Wrote:
(04-03-2018, 04:56 PM)Ron Wrote: reading part 1 of chapter 3, what kind of office he got a job in, not really friendly people are in there.
finish work till going home, feels like slavery work, do work do work and those hiden camera's bap reh, alcoholic workers are okay but those who don't finish their work are fearing their boss 

i feel arjun is here for higher job, lets see what happens next, don't mind me in commenting par parts of this chapter, also working also reading 
so far enjoying this one.

will comment after again Smile

Yes, the office & the whole environment in the office is indeed suspicious. Let's see what Arjun is here. It's okay & it's really a treat to read your reviews. I am glad that you are liking the progress.

em glad you enjoying reading my reviews  Big Grin will read on and surely comment on it
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