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Checkmate- Sam-Arj (Aham & Kashmira) FIC, PART 19 UPDATED on 22.4.2018
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(28-02-2018, 12:59 PM)Ron Wrote: wow, just read the Prologue and it started as  a suspense, interesting start, whom did he send the sms, why someone killed him, what is going on, looks interesting, will read more.

Thank You Ron for reading the Prologue & liking it. Well, you need to read the upcoming chapters to know more.
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(28-02-2018, 01:11 PM)Ron Wrote: Indeed nice introduction to everyone. nice familiar faces, looking fw to read the rest of it, will read the chapter and post my comments, thanks for sharing it with us Angel

Thanks again for liking the characters sketches & the casts. Will wait for your review. I am thankful that you are reading.
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Part - 2

6:40 AM

Samaira Khanna was standing in the bus depot with her luggage.The bus will be leaving for Mumbai at 7am.Samaira went to the nearby tea-stall to buy a Mineral water bottle.Suddenly, she heard a familiar male voice from her behind.

Good Morning Samaira.

She looked at that direction.She saw Arjun.Arjun Mehra was standing there with a luggage hand-bag.But he is looking slightly different from yesterday's night.He is wearing spectacles.

Samaira- heyy Arjun.Good Morning.You here.What a pleasant surprise.

Arjun- Why surprising???I live in Mumbai,I was in Khandala because of some urgent piece of work.Now, the work is over & I am leaving for Mumbai.

Samaira- same pinch.By the way, how's your wound???

Arjun- Its fine.I took pain-killer.

Samaira-Again thanks for your help.The way the bas***ds attacked...

Arjun- heyy Relax.Its absolutely okay.U said last night naa, Humanity matters.Thats it.

Samaira- thanks again.

Arjun- When U gonna to stop your thanks puran????

Samaira smiled slightly.Arjun extended his hand towards Samaira.

Arjun- Friends????

Samaira was looking at Arjun with a very surprised look on her face.

Arjun- If we become friends your thanks giving will stop automatically.In Friendship, there is no place for Sorry & thanks.

Samaira smiled & shake hand with Arjun."Friendship Offer Accepted"Said Samaira.

Arjun- We will continue our conversation in bus, warna bus will leave for Mumbai without us.

Inside the Bus,

 Samaira- heyy, I will take the Window seat.

Arjun- Why???Do U have vommitting tendency while travelling in bus???(in a fun tone)

Samaira- eeeks, cheee, How mean.

Arjun-(With a small smile)- No, the way U are saying, I found urgency in your tone.

Arjun- arre baba, it's a common thing, when a girl & a boy is sitting together in a bus or in train, even in flight, he should give the Window seat to the girl.

Samaira- No, I object.I believe in equality.Infact, I strickly oppose ladies seat in bus & ladies compartment in train.

Arjun- woahh,By any chance, do U work in National Commission for women???

Samaira- No, I asked Window seat because U offered friendship.As a friend, I asked, not as a lady.

Arjun- ( with a small smile) I may catch cold if I take window seat, So I am gladly giving U the seat.

Bus Conductor- arre betho naa tum log, bus chodne ka waqt ho gaya hai.Samaira took the Window seat & Arjun took the seat beside Samaira.

Samaira- You are so sarcastic.Neil jaisa koi nahin.He is such a sweet Guy.

Arjun- Neil, your boyfriend????

Samaira- No, My best-friend.My Apple.

Arjun- apple???

Samaira- Yes,for his sweet, simple & caring nature, I gave him this nick-name Apple.

Arjun- That's great.

Samaira- By the way,your martial arts skill is superb.Last Night, I forgot to appreciate it.

Arjun- Thanks, Thank U so much.

Samaira- U know, I am thinking that I should learn some self-defence technique.Last night, I felt so helpless.

Arjun- Yes, U should.Why to depend on others??? Aapne safety, aapne haath.

Samaira- hmm, but tumne to ek saath 4-5 ko road pe leta diya.dhisumm, dhisumm.Its just like watching an action scene in a Salman Khan's movie.

Arjun- it's a biggest compliment that I am receiving from a lady.

Samaira- boo, dont tell lie.Kitne Girlfriends hai tumhare???

Arjun- Girlfriends???

Samaira- Don't tell me that You are married.

Arjun- No, I am not married.But I don't have any GirlFriend.

Samaira- Boo, U are so hansome, U are also looking so young & You are telling me that U don't have any girlfriend.Dont joke yaar.

Arjun- No, Its not a joke.I started my journey from an Orphan-home.Its a tough journey.Still struggling.So, never get the time for all this.

Samaira- ohh, I am so Sorry.But U know, what is more painful??expectation from someone.

They both looked at each other.Arjun saw strange pain in her eyes.But he don't said anything. He put his hand on Her's hand.

Samaira- But Don't ask anything about it.I don't want to share this with anybody.

Arjun nodded his head.

Arjun- U know, sometimes by sharing with others, U may find solution & peace also.

Samaira- leave naa.By the way, Who is your favourite Actress???

Arjun- I got the fact, that Ur Favourite Actor is Salman Khan.But U should ask about my Favourite Actor naa, Why are U asking my fav Actress???

Samaira- For me, opposite sex choices matters.

Arjun- ohh, Well, my favourites are Deepika, Kangana, Anushka,Katrina, Vidya

Samaira- arre bas bas.

Arjun- I cant differentiate among beautiful ladies.

Samaira- wow, U are a flirt also.Last night, I thought, U are a very serious type of Person.

Arjun- Who I am??? It's a very difficult equation, very tough maths.You will need a lot of time & hardwork to crack it.

Samaira- I am very bad in Maths.I work in an Advertisement agency.

Arjun started laughing.

Samaira- don't laugh.Yes, its true, I cant judge people's mind.Always I try to understand people's heart.Trust comes from heart & trust is the main factor in every relationship.

Arjun- I don't trust people so easily.Trust is fatal for me.

Samaira- What???

Arjun- arre, I am an Accountant.I have to do lot of calculations.Its a brain's work.

Samaira- hmm.

Bus stopped in a Petrol Pump.Most of the passengers got down from the bus.Arjun was standing outside, holding Samaira's bag.Arjun lit a cigarette.Samaira came out from the Wash-room.She saw Arjun.She came & stand beside him, but she maintained distance.

Arjun- I am looking like an idiot, holding a ladies bag.Take your bag.

Samaira- will definitely take my bag.First U complete your Cigarette, I don't want to be a victim of passive smoking.

Arjun- Goshhh.

Samaira snatch her bag from Arjun & climbed into the bus.Arjun brought a newspaper, then climbed into the bus.

Arjun- Smoking is the only bad habits of mine.

Samaira- I don't want to give my precious conciousness lectures to those intelligent people, who dig their own graves.

Arjun- Now, who is Sarcastic???

Samaira- huhh, anyway, give me the Entertainment page, baaki U read the whole newspaper, I don't think U have any interest in Gossips.

In Mumbai,

The bus finally reached Mumbai.

Samaira- Byee Arjun.Its so nice meeting with U.

Arjun- hmm.

Then suddenly Arjun hold Samaira's hand.Samaira gave him a surprised look, but she didn't protest.Arjun pick out a pen from his shirt's pocket & wrote his mobile number on Samaira's hand.

Arjun- My contact number.Sorry,Don't have any paper.So, writing it in your hand.okay, chalo byee.

Arjun smiled looking at Samaira & left from there.Samaira stood there for sometimes.then, she took her luggage, called a Auto & left from there.

 

Arjun Mehra is standing infront of Khanna Industries.He finally reached.But it is not his ultimate destination.Bas rasta nila hai, Manzil abhi dur hai.

He adjusted his spectacles & entered into the office & showed his joining letter in thr reception desk.

 
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(28-02-2018, 06:37 PM)Madhumita Wrote:
(28-02-2018, 12:59 PM)Ron Wrote: wow, just read the Prologue and it started as  a suspense, interesting start, whom did he send the sms, why someone killed him, what is going on, looks interesting, will read more.

Thank You Ron for reading the Prologue & liking it. Well, you need to read the upcoming chapters to know more.

sure i will.
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thanks madhu for sharing this story with us, chapter 1 and 2 ill continue reading tomorrow and surely will share my views with you. so far as it started, it looks amazing.
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Hi...
I have started reading the 1st prologue and it looks interesting. 
I read many stories but reading suspense is new experience for me, watched suspense in movies but imagine reading it is something else, you have to imagine the happening. i am surely going to read this one.
   
Rehan
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Hi, 
Me reading chapter 1, so far I am enjoying the way this story has started, at times parents want us to do same things as them, be their copy or fulfill their dreams, being a daughter of business man doesn't mean she has to be business woman herself but people don't understand that every person has his / her hobbies / talents. At least she is doing what she loves and not forced into joining business work. 

why her mother left, is a mystery, reasons can be mother fault and maybe mother no fault, example dad left her and took away their daughter, maybe her mom is dead or maybe she actually did leave them and run off with some other guy, many reasons can be... ill read on and see the rest of it.
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Arjun mehra's entry in chapter one was interesting one, like a filmy hero saved the girl.

One thing is that, who is he? from where he came? interesting entry here, btw that guy is handsome no doubt good looking man, liked their introduction their chat was interesting one.

Woman / man should not trust stranger so quickly but she wanted to do what is right to do. 

So far, enjoyed chapter one, ended so quickly.. will read chapter two  Big Grin

Keep it up, I loved your story, thanks for posting it on shaanse, highly appreciated. 
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(28-02-2018, 10:43 PM)Rehan Wrote: Hi...
I have started reading the 1st prologue and it looks interesting. 
I read many stories but reading suspense is new experience for me, watched suspense in movies but imagine reading it is something else, you have to imagine the happening. i am surely going to read this one.

Rehan

Yes.. read karo rehan jee.. 
more readers are always welcome
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Read chapter 2- This is called, Small world, he didn't know who she was or who is her dad or anything else but is joining her dad's business.. Hmm goood

it was amazing chapter, enjoyed their travel to mumbai together, who is arjun and why is he here, is one big question, something interesting is about to be open. 

who knows, it was pre planned meeting like, he is the one sending the goons to her, fighting them, winning over them , being her friend, n in the end, joining new job in her dad's office..

Something fishy, Looking fw to read your next chapter.
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